George had a great article called “Evicted
From Park, Occupy Protesters Take to the Sidewalks”. It really focuses on the
topic and it looks like he took a long time on it. This is a really good thing.
I feel like if I try to focus a little more on the topic, I will do as great as
George.
The next person I read from was
Kiana. I really liked her Essay. I think that she did a great job on it and
there was a lot off effort shown. I think that my essays should have a little more
on the topic, just like hers does. If I write a little more and elaborate on my
topic I will have a better essay.
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